MESSAGE IN A BOTTLE…ONCE FULL
a river of tears released
into his handkerchief, his tiny initials
embroidered in its corner
she breathes in deeply
as the evaporation of the mist
makes the water visible before her
grief supersedes reason,
she reads her words one last time
before she slides them into the bottle:
this bottle, once full,
serves as a reminder
of how empty my life is without you
your words, you used
to knead my wounded soul,
no longer echo in this world
your touch, you used
to melt away my fears,
is no longer felt in this world
your love, you gave
to cleanse my picture of self,
is no longer given in this world
this bottle, now filled with my words,
serves as a reminder
that my life can be full once more
with a final whisper of goodbye
she watches as water and seaweed
tug at her words…and her heart
2011-05-08 10:20 p.m.
P. Wanken
written for Sunday Whirl prompt (as pictured above) for 2011-05-08 and Poetic Bloomings prompt: water
This morning as I read these two prompts I immediately noticed the connection. “Water” was one of the wordle words for Sunday Whirl. How much more connected could they be!? With no time to write, right then, I headed out the door for the day. All day, instead of a NEW poem forming in my mind, I couldn’t stop thinking about “Once Full“, a poem I had written for Day 20 of Poetic Asides NaPoWriMo challenge. Tonight, when I finally sat down to write, it was a bit more of the story surrounding “Once Full” that came from my fingers on the keyboard, rather than something new.
I’d love to know what you think…does it add to the original? Or should I have left the original alone and started from scratch with the wordle words?
echoes from the silence 