HOTLINE
dusk settles;
a shiver, linked to evening air,
races through me,
not a trace of sun
empty of essential warmth
I watched the sun set as the moon rose
pencil poised
tall, like a fence post,
ready to record chain of requests
following a recipe for absolution,
I too plead to be forgiven,
and check in with the operator…
“Prayer Hotline is now open.”
2012-08-26
P. Wanken
Inspired by The Sunday Whirl’s Prompt #71: dusk, link, trace, empty, essentials, rose, pencils, fence, chain, recipe, forgiven, and operator. Also posted for Day 54 at “100 Days of Summer” — click here to go to their Facebook page.
I love the prayer hotline idea, Paula, and “pencil poised
tall, like a fence post,”
I also got a kick out of your piku from Friday night!
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Thanks, Laurie…for all. I just couldn’t resist capturing the Friday “event” somehow. 🙂
As always…thanks for your support!
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This is an elegant and concise use of the wordle words. I had to look several times to find them! A lovely little poem, with heart.
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Aw, thank you, ViV!! ❤
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I, too, love the poised pencil word-picture.
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Thank you, brebry. 🙂
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Love that beginning line–a shiver linked to evening air-made me shiver too!
beautiful 🙂
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Sara, thank you…your support means so much!
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Very nice, Paula. I could feel the chill in the first stanza, and love where you took the piece. Well done!
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Thanks, Brenda! (…I’m so behind on reading this week…but I really appreciate your stopping by!)
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Powerful.
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Thanks, McGuffy!
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This is a delight, so well done I forgot you were using wordle words. I like the “pencil poised tall like a fence post” and the shivers of dusk. Lovely.
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A fine compliment…to know the wordle words disappeared. 🙂
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Love those last two stanzas, and your ending. I can see the pencil poised like a fence post. Great image.
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Thank you so much, Sara! 🙂
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absolute tear-jerker, [Paula]. You really are a gifted word-smith.
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Thank you, Janet…I appreciate your visit and your kind words.
(I corrected my name. ;))
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