Once Full
this bottle, once full,
serves as a reminder
of how empty my life is without you
your words, you used
to knead my wounded soul,
no longer echo in this world
your touch, you used
to melt away my fears,
is no longer felt in this world
your love, you gave
to cleanse my picture of self,
is no longer given in this world
this bottle, now filled with my words,
serves as a reminder
that my life can be full once more
2011-04-20 7:00 p.m.
P. Wanken
Written for Poetic Asides poem-a-day challenge
Day 20: write a “message in a bottle”
and
Three Word Wednesday‘s prompt: cleanse, knead, melt
echoes from the silence 
So very sad and so very beautiful!
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Thanks, Gemma….I appreciate the visit and the comment.
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The title is perfect for this sorrowful piece….well done!
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Thank you, Gloria…I changed the title 4-5 times before I published…appreciate the feedback!
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A sad poem of loss, relieved by that touch of hopeful recovery at the end.
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Thanks for stopping by, Alt!
This was written for all those whose lives are touched by loss…I pray they all find hope and healing in the end.
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Well, Paula, now I’m crying… but it’s a good cry, you know what I mean? From the first line, “This bottle, once full…” I sensed the mood you were creating, and your work was very cohesive and touching. Loved it! Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/04/20/laptopia-ode-to-starbucks-haiku/
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Thank you, Amy!
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Oh, heartbreaking and beautiful.
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Thanks, Bee….I hope you buzz back by another day! 😉
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Oh, I’ll be by again for sure! I like your stuff a lot 🙂
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It’s always sad to lose the bottle we so loved and treasured..I am glad there are new ones..and words with which to fill it..Jae
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Jae~ Thanks for stopping by…loved your comments. ~Paula
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The narrator’s sorrow is tangible. And that last line eloquently states the fact that one can, eventually, live on.
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Thanks, Kim, for stopping by and for your comments. I appreciate it! ~Paula
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This is lovely, sad at the beginning, but then hopeful at the end. And those middle three stanzas – so well structured and well written.
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Thanks, Mr. Walker. Appreciate the feedback!
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Love lingers in memories and moments learned. It comes around again. Beautiful.
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Thanks, Christine…I appreciate your comments!
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Touching and so true in a break-up.
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Yes, Sheilagh…a break-up or a death. I was thinking of the latter when I wrote this one.
Thanks for your comment!
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