Lost In A Crowd

LOST IN A CROWD

Is there anybody there?
she asks in the crowded room.
Her words linger in stifled air.
Is there anybody there?
She is met with stares
then conversations resume.
Is there anybody there?
she asks in the crowded room.

2012-06-18
P. Wanken

Inspired by Carry On Tuesday prompt #160, to use part of the opening line of Walter de la Mare’s poem “The Listeners”…Is there anybody there?

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    1. Thanks, De. I decided on the triolet form because that question just repeating in my head. I think I’ve only written one other triolet, so I had to hunt down the rules and remember if that was the one I was thinking of…so yes, the repeating phrase worked. Both for what was rattling in my head, as well as for what the poem needed to convey. Thanks for the feedback. As for the phrase “words linger in stifled air” — as soon as I wrote it I thought “that’s a keeper.” πŸ™‚

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    1. Thanks, Sara…I actually debated (in my head) whether she should ask the question aloud, or only in her head…I changed my mind a few times before I finished! πŸ˜‰

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