INTO A SPLIT ON THE HORIZON
her glow fades,
she crashes…crumpling
into the bruise
of darkness
crouching on the edge,
he waits his turn
to chisel a place
for himself
with each beat
–each passing tick
of the clock–
he draws her back
as her radiance
bursts forth,
piercing the darkness,
he disappears
into a split on the horizon
2012-06-03
P. Wanken
Inspired by the words from The Sunday Whirl Prompt #59: split, bruise, crumple, draw, burst, pierce, crash, chisel, crouch, glow, edge, and beat.
Whew, I found myself breathless at the end of this poem. Loved the ending, and wonder if he will return.
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Thank you, Mary…
And yes, “he” keeps coming back! 😉
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Lovely, the constant dance between night and day. Beautiful imagery.
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Thank you, DDT! 🙂
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She must stop the cycle b/c he is a jerk! See- you riled me up, girl. Great poem!
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Thanks, Laurie! Unfortunately…this “cycle” never ends!
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Buh-Bye mister, may the split swallow him whole!
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The split does swallow him whole…every night! 😉
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How very clever. Might be the first description of sunrise and sunset I have read, that is not cliche. I love it.
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Thank you so much, margo!! ❤
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Clever – had to read it twice. I like the tension between the two of them. I like “he draws her back” and “the bruise / of darkness”.
Richard
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Thank you, Richard! 🙂 I’m not exactly sure how my thoughts brought me to this topic for these wordle words…but it was one of those poems that, at the end, I smiled. (But maybe that was because I managed to figure out a way to use “bruise.”) 😉
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This reminds me of a Star Trek (newer series) episode, that actually was a play with the Aztec Sun and Moon Gods fighting for dominance in the sky.
‘with each beat
–each passing tick
of the clock–
he draws her back’ The never ending cycle.
Wonderfully and enchantingly wordled!
My offering is here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/06/whirl-59-freed-spirit.html
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I didn’t watch the newer series, but loved all the “oldies” of Star Trek! Thanks for making the comparison. 🙂
Glad you liked it.
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LoveloveLOVE
“crumpling
into the bruise
of darkness”
And what Margo said. YES.
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Thank you, de. ❤
I had a lot of fun writing this one.
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This is somewhat enigmatic to me but not in a bad way just puzzling … I like that about it … and your use of the wordle words is lovely
http://leapinelephants.blogspot.ca/2012/06/deep-tissue-bruising.html
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ah…enigmatic…I tried not to use the normal words one would associate with such a relationship…which, I believe, added the mystery.
Thanks, Sharon!
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I also saw the night/day, moon/sun imagery in this one. That dance between two celestial partners – you brought it to life for us. Thanks!
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Yay! 🙂 “Celestial partners” indeed. Glad you felt the life in it. Thanks, Traci!
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Wow, Paula! Sunrise and Sunset, beautifully sculpted piece.
Pamela
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Thanks, Pamela. 🙂
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liked this very much. yep, very much
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Thank you, Mark. Yep, very much! 😉
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Perhaps because it is late in the day, I didn’t catch it immediately. When I did, I find myself echoing Margo. Love the absolute lack of cliched images and the underlining of the mythical divinity aspect. Really, really like this Paula,
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/06/03/souls-music-ii/
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Thank you, Elizabeth! I love writing about the moon — and I had a lot of fun writing this one, without using some of the “same old” phrases about the sun/moon relationship. I appreciate your feedback. 🙂
~ Paula
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Paula love the phase “into the bruise of darkness” great use of words and great ending:-)
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Thank you, Sara! 🙂
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Wow wow wow! I’m in love with this! 🙂 ❤
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Thank you so much, Amber. And thanks for stopping by. 🙂
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Gorgeous writing, Paula! I especially loved your first stanza: “her glow fades,
she crashes…crumpling into the bruise of darkness.” Spectacular!
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Thank you, Marianne. I’m glad you liked it! 🙂
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An exquisite dance of day and night!
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Thank you so much, Susan. I appreciate your comment and your visit. 🙂
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