A Dance With A Dragon

A DANCE WITH A DRAGON

drawing upon the abstract
her heart aches for him
drawn to him, in spite of the cacophony
the coda to her life’s score

flying free on dragon’s wings
loving—and mourning—the ethereal
exquisite, the moment they shared
so sour, the departure, as if fermented

folded up, as precise as origami
she was shelved, as a toy that lost its shine,
until music filled her shimmy
her spangling catching his eye once again

2012-04-21
P. Wanken

Written for The Sunday Whirl “Anniversary” prompt: aches, exquisite, abstract, shelved, ferment, dragon, coda, shimmy, origami, spangling, cacophony, and ethereal.

PS – a note about the process I used to write this week’s wordle: I wrote one line for each of the twelve words, in the order they were provided in the email. Whatever came to mind. And then I arranged the words in alpha order, and arranged their corresponding lines in that order. I had to change a couple pronouns, and added one word. I was amazed it actually flowed.

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35 comments

  1. Paula, I love this, it sparkles. But please, why the composite invention “shininess”? What’s wrong with “shine” – almost assonant with “again,” the simplicity so much more pleasing to the ear.
    Do edit this comment out if it offends you.

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    1. Oh yes….much better. And of course it doesn’t offend! (Long story behind “shininess” – which should stay out of my poetry for the sake of the ear! 😉 )

      *hugs*

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  2. This is beautiful and rich and oh-so-light. I loved the last two lines, picturing music filling her ‘shimmy,’ etc. Nice use of the words.

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    1. Thank you, Inger. I was pleased with how it ended up flowing. I added a “P.S.” to my post — some process notes on how I arrived at this poem.

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    1. Thank you, Pamela. It surprised me when I was all done. 🙂 I added a “P.S.” to my post — some process notes on how I arrived at this poem.

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  3. Ha, I came down to say lovely flow, and see it is an echo, which certainly makes it true. 🙂 Thank you for your continued commitment to The Whirl, Paula. And to writing good poetry. You rock!

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    1. Thank you, Sharon. I’m glad I went back and added the process notes. I didn’t put them there at first, but I felt like I wanted to share with everyone how this one worked itself into a poem. 🙂 Glad you enjoyed it.

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    1. Thank you for coming by, Elizabeth. So happy to see your name popping up again. 🙂 It was an entirely different process for me, for sure. I’m not certain I’d have tackled those words any other way! 😉 Hope you have fun giving it a try one day.

      ~ Paula

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  4. Paula, I love the poem – it works so well. You made each stanza exquisitely shimmy. I have to try this. Glad you included the post script. Even though you mentioned possibly doing this, I’m not sure I would have noticed.

    Richard

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    1. Mark – I hadn’t included the notes at first, so I’m glad you found them fascinating. Yes, I was amazed at how it fit together. Because that list of words!? Oy!

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  5. Wordles are always a challenge, but I think this one must have been very hard to write. The list of words is rather unusual. I’d probably have given up. Yet, you made it look so easy.

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