SOMETHING NEW
a glance is exchanged
his breath, inhaled and held
the energy in the room
blends with his own adrenaline
emerging from his world
of cloak and dagger, tricks and flames
he pushed himself to this place,
beyond his comfort zone
flexing, and relaxing – not forceful –
he slowly exhales
his eyes meet the sweet smile
of the woman who makes his life richer
with a touch of the dramatic
they emerge from the crowd
for their first dance as husband and wife
2012-04-15
P. Wanken
Written for The Sunday Whirl #52, using the following words: sweet, richer, dramatic, forceful, tricks, flames, energy, push, glance, exchange, breath, flexible, and blend. (I took a bit of liberty with the word “flexible” – and used “flexing.”)
SPECIAL NOTE: This, being prompt #52, concludes an entire year of writing a poem each week for The Sunday Whirl. A special thanks to Brenda Warren who has faithfully provided the prompt each week.
echoes from the silence 
This is great, Paula. I like how the identity is a surprise, and how the title fits the piece. Clever.
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🙂 Glad you liked the surprise aspect. It was fun to write it that way. And thank you for the comment on the title…I swear that took longer to nail down than writing all of the rest of it! 😉
As always — thanks for providing us with a place to Whirl! 😉
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The first three stanzas led me to expect an adventure story, so the remainder enchanted me with its tenderness.
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🙂 I had fun writing this — not being so evident in the beginning, with where it would end up. However, having never been married, I would suspect that he was still about to embark on an adventure! 😉
*hugs* to you, ViV!
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Yep. I was heading for spy until you pulled the switch. Great fun and clever.
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It’s always interesting to see the picture that comes to mind when I read the words…I could probably write short fiction for them, but force myself to hone in on just what’s needed for the poem. The picture was quite vivid!
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I love the surprise ending, was totally not what I expected. Very, very nice use of the wordle words.
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Thank you, DDT. 🙂
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Yes, your poem definitely has a surprise ending. A very touching one — both literally and figuratively. Well wordled, Paula!
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Thank you so much, Mary. 🙂
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Beautiful writing, especially: “with a touch of the dramatic they emerge from the crowd for their first dance as husband and wife” and a lovely surprise ending. I expected something completely different from your words: “emerging from his world of cloak and dagger, tricks and flames.”
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Thank you, Marianne. 🙂
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Hi Paula. Like the surprise ending, was expecting something far different. Really like the manner in which you used the words. Thanks for the visit,
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/
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Thank you, Elizabeth. And…again: good to see you! 🙂
~Paula
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You really pulled me in and left me with a smile–Nice!
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Yay for SMILES! 🙂
Thanks, Sara.
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Paula, the title is perfect – such layered meanings. I like how he pushed himself “past his comfort zone” – considering the “world” he came from. A nice twist there.
Richard
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Thank you, Richard! As I mentioned to Brenda, I think the title took longer to write than the poem! I appreciate your comment re: layered meanings and the twist. It was a fun poem to write. 🙂
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