I’ve come to the end of my day, feeling quite empty.
I look for what can fill me, discovering my night’s empty.
The longing for love is strong, like an addiction,
Like an addiction to what once swirled in this bottle, right empty.
Early on in this search, I looked for who could fill me.
My search for the best quality red, rose’ or white: empty.
And then my standards lessened, as desperation set in.
I consumed it all, whatever I might empty.
Now alone, I jiggle the door to that last locked cabinet.
I catch my reflection in the glass, Paula, what a sad sight: empty.
PROCESS NOTES: I started out again with a desire to write process notes before I’ve even put words down for the poem. As I’ve analyzed this desire, I believe that writing some of the process notes is a way to organize my thoughts. My own version of “mind mapping” or “free writing,” I guess.
Also once again, I’m combining multiple prompts. I’m not sure if it’s because I like the challenge of combining prompts, or if they just fit nicely together, or if I get behind on responding to individual prompts and I can’t let a good prompt get away!
If you frequent the prompt sites, you might have recognized some of them…otherwise, here are the ones I used:
Tuesday Tryout: a Ghazal form
Persian poetic form: five to fifteen couplets using the same word at the end of both lines of the first couplet with an internal rhyme preceding it; and using that word at the end of the second line of each subsequent couplet (as well as the internal rhyme); and using the poet’s name in the final couplet. Though contemporary Ghazals can be on any theme, the traditional Ghazal is written on the topic of love or wine. I chose both. And, though I used my name in the final couplet, didn’t write this from my own experience. This IS however, my first Ghazal experience!
Three Word Wednesday: jiggle, early, quality (plus a bonus word from a friend: “swirl”)
Poetic Asides: write a poem using “empty”
Poets United – Thursday Think Tank: Nighttime was the listed theme.
We Write Poems: write a poem using Parallelism
Parallelism is a kind of rhyme, in which an idea is developed by the use of repetition. There are two types of parallelism: synonymous parallelism (two lines expressing the same idea) and antithetic parallelism (two lines expressing opposite ideas). “Hmmm….two lines. As in couplet? Fits nicely with the Ghazal requiring couplets,” I thought. Not sure if I used “two lines” the way the prompt intended…but I did attempt a synonymous parallelism.
Margo Roby’s Wordgathering for Thursday: This wasn’t so much of a prompt as it was a teaching on mind mapping and rhyming. And I decided what better time than trying to write a Ghazal to use some of the strategies Margo suggests. I didn’t use the tools she included in her link. But I definitely put more thought into what to include in this poem via mind mapping, than I have in any other poem!
So. This poem was the result. I’d love to get your input/feedback!