MOOD SWINGS
pale gray links
in the chain of the melancholy
stray movements
to and fro
tall flowing grasses
spray of flowers
tickle the feet
rosy colored flight
lavish gold
covered in powders
the flings
of the erotic
2012-07-23
P. Wanken
Inspired by The Sunday Whirl’s Prompt #66: swing, rosy, erotic, cover, powders, stray, pale, melancholy, fling, gold, grasses, and spray. Also posted for Day 19 at “100 Days of Summer” — click here to go to their Facebook page; and for Open Link Night Week #54 at dVerse Poets Pub.
Love this
Thanks, Len. Glad you liked it.
Natural mood swings… Nice!
I’m here when you’re able…
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/07/sw-66-enchanted.html
Thanks for stopping by, Jules.
Tantalising; more like an abstraction than a classical painting. Glimpses and hints of images that tease. I’m going to re-read it.
Thank you, Misky — I was trying to be sparse in my descriptions so as to hint. Thanks for the feedback letting me know I hit the mark with that.
Very good and how you lay out , very good too.. Suits the poem
Thank you, Cathy! I appreciate the feedback.
nice….really nice imagery throughout…the spray of flowers and tickled feet…nice allusion to barefeet, which is the best way to go for me…
Thank you, Brian — I’m glad you were able to connect with the imagery!
Very concise use of word list, with great imagery !!
Thanks for the feedback!
I loved to swing on wooden seats tied to massive tree limbs, ground worn below, so this tickles me as the grass tickles my feet whether I twist to twirl back in slow and “stray movements’ or pump to the horizon over seas of golden rod and grasses, bachelor buttons, Queen Ann’s Lace, black-eyed Susan’s and daisies. More than once I stamped out there alone, more than once I felt–though I did not know it then–the call of the erotic. Thanks for the memories (even if you were taking this elsewhere).
Susan – you followed me, exactly. Thanks for stopping by — glad to have sparked some memories. ~Paula
I love the sparsity of this…the negative spaces that let my mind fill in the rest. Nicely done.
~Ais
Thank you for that feedback, Aisling!
I’m an expert on mood swings, hee hee (BiPo humor). This really caught me by the heel, Paula, and held on. I’ve had days that started drinking coffee in the Back 40 amid wildflowers, went to overproduction like some brainiac – then, heeding the relentless call of Eros, out to a bar to stir up something. Maybe trouble, maybe bliss, but I never knew their names. Needless to say, I’m in a different place now!! Thx for the trip down Foggy Memory Lane! Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/07/24/real-women-dverse/
Amy! Thanks for stopping by and for the comment.