Finding Peace

FINDING PEACE

entranced
I watched them

their murmurs
cumbersome

reluctant was she
to answer

her hands
holding a map

his eyes strayed
to where I hid

pelts, we had
his senses, we needed

dense smoke
cemented the deal

2012-02-26
P. Wanken

Written for The Sunday Whirl #45, to use the following words: pelt, cumbersome, smoke, reluctant, entranced, dense, map, answer, stray, murmur, senses, and cement.

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14 comments

    1. Thank you, Brenda. As DDT pointed out, such deals were not always so peaceful. Simpler, maybe, but not always with the result that was wanted. I opted for a happier ending. ;)

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    1. Thanks, Richard! I was so tempted to go the opposite direction and write “flash fiction!” ;) It was a great exercise in restraint — without leaving out too much. I’m glad you felt the reluctance/hiding. I’m not sure if it’s because of the structure, but I had it without the blank lines — and then added them. I felt it conveyed the “space/distance” between the woman and the trader. Anyway…thanks for the feedback. :)

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